Night rises behind the tall walls

Of endless rows of houses

Some windows light up

Distant tunes come towards me

Impenetrable veil drapes the stars

That deign to look on the

Electric light garlands decorating silent trees.

Awaiting the New Year

Day walked the endless corridors

in sinking sands

Without finding you

Moon wakes up at mid night

where are your desires?

Waiting for him in that corridor?

I fall asleep in your dreams.

{Dedicated to fkregieblog for always understanding} 

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6 thoughts on “DREAMS FALL ASLEEP

  1. i am honored that you will dedicate such a powerful piece to me. this is really beautifully crafted. you’ll pardon me if my response to it is longer than my usual response, but this is because, for me, a poem that encapsulates all you’ve written thus far. i know you have your own reasons behind the use of tropes in this poem, but here is my reading of the poem.

    i love the opening line “night rises behind the tall walls.” i love the use of paired images of confinement – night = as in darkness, as in no light in the current situation. “tall walls,” = confinement, but then the ‘tall’ in the phrase underlines the strength of the confinement. so, taken together, darkness is determined to surpass the confinement of the persona. but then the persona hears “tunes” the indication of a happy life outside of this dark confinement – distant, as the melody is coming from a place remotely removed from where the persona is – a distant voice instead of a physical presence – tunes may also refer to music.

    “of endless rows of houses/some windows light up.” endless rows of houses infers night may have a series of houses, but “some windows light up,” does not refer to windows in these row of houses. could it mean there are others in the vicinity who don’t live in darkness – and the persona knows this, if this is the use of lighted windows here, it must increase the desolation of the person. the windows that light up may also refer to chances the persona has of getting out of the darkened house with tall walls. here, you used the universal symbol of window meaning a desire for freedom – the imagery of someone dissatisfied with their present situation standing by a window and looking out to a world the idealizes freedom – for instance, the lighted windows.

    i love “impenetrable veil.” again a paired image of strength/solidity and weakness/fragility. could this be a wall the persona has put up that prevents ‘light’ from coming in. i have noticed your frequent use of stars and light – images of light that underline a wish to move from darkness to light. could it be the efforts of night that throws a veil on day’s inner potentials. if day has any talent, then this is a powerful combined imagery of how a jealous lover destroys the talents of a lover in an effort to avoid competition – remember “my last duchess.”

    still on “impenetrable veil drapes the stars/that deign to look on the electric light/garlands decorating silent tree.” impenetrable veil here refers to man/marriage that prevents the persona from being admired (by others) or the persona (admiring others). electric light has two meanings – something that lights up the gloom in the persona’s life, and suggest something that isn’t a natural (persona) provider of light – the persona needs someone else to lift her out of the gloom. it is also something suggestive of intense passion curtailed by the darkness and tall walls. also, electric lights (emotions) have controls – so they can be switched off and on by someone unlike natural lights – stars and moon. but natural lights have a time lease, no matter how well they light, they have a time frame that is predetermined and predictable. electric lights, though controllable, can remain on for as long as someone wants them on. “garlands decorating silent tree,” refers to forced marriage or an unwanted union. in some cultures, the garland/lei is a symbol of welcome, a gesture of the offer of peace. it also used in these customs as a ritual in the ceremony of marriage as an offer of love. here, however, these positive use of garland/lei is reversed. the ‘tree’ that receives it is silent – enforced marriage or a marriage of convenience. however, the more interesting use of these paired images is in the fact that garlands/leis are made from flowers, though not a tree, a plant that provides flowers can stand for a tree. so, the interesting use here of a gallant/lei on a silent tree is, wasted profession of love and peace – a tree doesn’t need its own flowers, but should, instead be allowed to bloom. “silent” in this phrase is the operative word in this usage and interpretation.

    “new year” here has a double meaning – new year calendrically, and new year as in new beginnings. but i love the use of “awaiting” as it contrasts the next phase of the poem – a trek to find the lover, instead of waiting for him to come to her. “endless corridors,” may refer to previous attempts to find such a person, nut the persona will not be deterred.

    “awaiting the new year/day walked the endless corridor.” this translates to ‘while waiting for the new year, day (persona) that has been locked up in the darkness of night and tall walls, decided to walk through the endless mind games and strategies employed to keep her within the dark house surrounded by tall walls. note the imagery of imprisonment in the use of “night” and “tall walls.” so day’s decision to walk the endless corridors, is in direct defiance to the wishes of night. day here is used metaphorically to refer to a light essence, but also ‘judgment day.’ for me, there is no judgment day as in the christian interpretation of a day God will judge all our actions. judgment day, for me, is any time you reflect on your situation or action and decide to do something about it. so, in this poem, as the new year approaches, the persona reflects on the situation and decides to ‘take a walk’ – get out of the oppressive situation. unlike what Arthur miller thinks regarding the “tragedy of the common man (sic)” the wish to do something about her condition will not result in tragedy – the tragedy is already being lived so anything other than this, will be better. that why i like the use of the word “deign” – something befitting. therefore “that deign to look,” means more deserving lover or more deserving love than the one the persona lives with in the oppressive house.

    i love the imagery of day walking in “endless corridors/in sinking sand/without finding you.” the imagery of continuous struggle and metaphor of the effort to succeed in spite of the sand threatening to drag her in. also, i love the images of “endless corridor” and “sand” – a maze/labyrinth and quicksand are the most difficult obstacles to overcome. brilliant imagery of a lover’s willingness to wait till she finds her lover – awake, or in his sleep.

    “moon wakes up at midnight/where are your desires?” moon here can be an admirer who is aware his desires are not requited, so has turned judgmental and sarcastic. “Where are your desires?” is a rhetorical question that acknowledges night and tall walls, and the presence of another admirer/lover that is preferred to him. ‘moon’ is the third phenomenon in a day – day, night, moon. but the fact that ‘moon’ only awakes at midnight shows that he is late in coming to the rescue of day – the link between the two being light. whereas, day would think moon, being a co-source of light would understand the entrapment of day, moon is rather self-serving and hypocritical. so, could moon be another woman. if moon is a woman, then the rhetorical questions are no longer chastisements but an acknowledgement of the strength of day’s desires.in the first reading of these lines, note the use of the word “that” in the phrase “waiting for him in that corridor?” the use of ‘that corridor’ infers that moon finds it adulterous or improper for day to seek a lover that will be more engendering of her wish for freedom and a hope for better life than that under night, but here is the hypocrisy – moon wouldn’t mind being with day. so, on the one hand he criticizes day’s hope as he realizes it is without him, he wouldn’t mind day being with him. this rejection has turned moon scornful and sarcastic. but i prefer the reading of ‘moon’ as woman.

    “i fall asleep in your dreams.” this conjures up the imagery of rest and peace. but it also suggests three layers of consciousness – wakefulness, sleep and dream. a phrase that suggests the persona is quite familiar with the sleeper – she knows him well enough to know the dreams are pleasant dreams, they are pleasant because she isn’t scared of falling asleep in the dreams. to fall asleep in someone’s dreams bridges the three layers of consciousness in this way – i am awake, beside your sleeping form and i am aware you are having dreams (of their future together), so I am going to lie beside you, fall asleep beside you (trust) and join you in your dreams – but this would mean, a double instance of sleep – the physical and the subconscious (dreams). note the pluralization of ‘dreams’, which could mean requited attentiveness, which could also mean (mutual) ambitions – of/for a future together. brilliant, brilliant piece. the best i have read from you so far.

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